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Post by Flintpelt [Spideh] on Jun 12, 2006 23:04:23 GMT -5
I still see one thing in the Personality that should be capitalized. It's in the third line, near the end. What does 'sharo' mean?
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Post by Katze on Jun 13, 2006 18:00:49 GMT -5
I have to wait for either Spideh of Silver to check spelling, but other than that, you are ready.
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Post by Flintpelt [Spideh] on Jun 13, 2006 23:12:22 GMT -5
1. You forgot some apostrophes. 2. Some things still need to be capitalized while others put back into non-capitalization. 3. You're still controlling Hawkstar by making him say something. 4. There are some typos to be corrected. 'Sharo' is one of them. It's supposed to be 'sharp'. And why say that she has sharp claws twice in the personality when 1. It should be there only once, and 2. It should be in the appearance? There. Done. Correct, please. Thankee :3
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Post by Katze on Jun 13, 2006 23:17:42 GMT -5
Whoops! Missed that!
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Hawkstar
Warrior
Queen Grafix = me
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Post by Hawkstar on Jun 29, 2006 18:01:33 GMT -5
Oh, forgot to say this but she has pemission to control my Charrie... as long as I review it first
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Post by Flintpelt [Spideh] on Jul 7, 2006 5:10:03 GMT -5
Frostfur, have you corrected yet?
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Frost
Apprentice
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Post by Frost on Jul 19, 2006 12:24:09 GMT -5
i was away for the whole summer, but now i'll be on on and off.
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Frost
Apprentice
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Post by Frost on Jul 24, 2006 7:11:58 GMT -5
And yes, i have corrected it. I personally think that it is the best and most decriptive bio that i have ever made. sorry for the doubble post.
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Post by Katze on Jul 26, 2006 23:02:20 GMT -5
Dang girl... Welcome to WindClan. Accepted ;D
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