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Post by Silverstream on Jun 17, 2006 10:26:22 GMT -5
Post here, Leopardtail.
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Leopardtail
Kit
I wish this was a vidio game...
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Post by Leopardtail on Jun 17, 2006 10:46:50 GMT -5
Name: Leoprdtail
Do you honor? Yes
Age: 16 moons
Gender: Tom
Appearance: Leapordtail is a sleek black cat with long tail. He has darting yellow eyes and a deep scar on his muzzle. His ruff sensitive fur has some places with no fur on back and belly. He has unusually sharp claws witch gives a advantage in battle.
RP Example: Leopordtail sat on the edge of the river listening to the breeze. The soft gental wind rippling againsed his face, making his whiskers twitch. He lay there for a while now focusing his ears on the birds. the swallow,blue jay, cardnal and, mocking bird, or was that an oriol were all singing together in a beautiful sound. The new green-leaf was not as plentiful as the last one he thoght but it would be enough. He wished his father was here so he could see the great warrior he had become. Then he heard a noise. His mind awoke from his daydream and he looked around... And he saw Wind Clan attack. He ran to camp to warn the others but it was to late they were already there. And the battle began.
Clan: Riverclan
Rank: Warrior
Breed: Tabby
Personality: He has a quick temper and keeps to his self. He doesent have many friends. He is considered a bit of a outcast. He will get mad about most petty problomes. He's a fight-starter...
History: Father:Mudpelt senior warrior killed in battle with shadow clan and wind clan. Mother: Biological: yellowheart medacine cat raised by Greyfur, warrior. Got a scar as a kit from looking in brambles got a bad scratch on his muzzle. Born with slightly shorter back left leg.
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Post by Silverstream on Jun 17, 2006 11:06:19 GMT -5
Oh joy. first off, copy and paste the coding from the cat descriptions thread. Then, edit your post above, and tell me that you edited it. I'll fix it from there.
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Post by Fernpaw on Jun 17, 2006 11:27:24 GMT -5
I know I'm not an admin, but I want to help. If my assistance is unneeded (which I don't think it will be because *coughyoucoughcoughneedcoughallthecoughcoughhelpyoucoughcanget*) then I will delete my post. Leopard, you will need to add a LOT more description in the Personality, History, RP Example and Appearance.
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Post by Katze on Jun 17, 2006 12:42:18 GMT -5
And better Grammer and Spelling...
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Post by Silverstream on Jun 21, 2006 10:11:40 GMT -5
Name: You missspelled his name.
Do you honor? Your good.
Age: Good...
Gender: Good...
Appearance: Again, you missspelled his name, and your appearance needs to have at least 5 more lines added.
Rp Example: Again, you missspelled his name, and a few other words besides. You need to add a few sentences here, and spell-check it.
Clan: It's RiverClan, not Riverclan.
Rank: Good...
Breed: Tabby is not a breed, it's a type of pelt on a cat. If you don't know the breed, put unknown.
Personality: You need at least 6 more lines.
History: Please put this in sentences, and spell-check it.
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Post by wowposter on Nov 8, 2008 8:31:14 GMT -5
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