Visiting the barn

[crowfur]

A jet black tom walked into the barn. No food for three days, prey's scarce. Hungry! the half starved tom thought. He scented a strong mouse smell. The tom went into a stalking position and creeped toward the freshest scent and pounced. Finally! the black tom thought gleefully as he ate the mouse with ravenous bites. Then he lay down in the hay. Another mouse scuttled by the lean body of the tom. he quickly got it in his mouth and ate it. Finally, something to eat, for a clan cat, I visit here often. Perhaps too often. the black tom thought. He looked around drowsily to see if anyone was in the barn. Usually the barn's buzzing with activity all the time. At least five cats here at any given time. the tom thought as he curled his extremely long tail around him. Guess not today, that's weird. Very weird, where did they go? the tom thought drowsily.

[The Everlasting SUNNEH.]

"Thunderclan!" Marley hissed. The scent was a stench beyond the Thunderpath or Bloodclan to his nose. BUt yet, he longed to walk the forest, without being poked or prodded by those Clan-cats.

He hid in the shadows, waiting for the time to attack the intruder. Suddenly, like a flash of lightning, Marley pinned Crowfur down.
"I thought Clan-cats were supposed to be fast and cunning!" Marley spat. "What do you want?" (I know it isn't 10 sentances, but what else am I supposed to write?)

[crowfur]

When a strange cat leaped, even in his drowsy state Crowfur leaped away.That was clo- his thoughts were cut short beacause the attacker had caught the end of his very long tail. I think I liked it when cats stepped on my tail better. he thought as Marley made his remark. "I got a long tail, so what? What are you? The commanding cat of this structure?" the black tom inquired. Need to choose my words carefully. No mistakes, last time I lost a mouse. This time it could be my tail, and then, my life. If I lose my tail I'll have to explain I was starving and that I went to the barn for prey. And got attacked by a loner, then, exile. the tom thought, somewhat scared. "What I want? I want a few mice to take back to my clan. And two for the energy to get there. And then go on a seven day trip for hunting catching something for the clan of course," he replied to the quary. "But if you wanna fight-" the tom unsheathed his long claws, "you got one." he said. No use being diplomatic with loners, they'll attack anyway. the black tom thought sadly.

[The Everlasting SUNNEH.]

Marley's eyes burned with rage. "You Clan-cats are always fighting for everything. Shelter. Food. The loyalty of others. Your lives are worth nothing in my eyes. You kill. You waste your energy. You scare good prey. You aren't welcome here." Marley spat, hissing with anger. "And aren't you supposed to feed your precious Clan first? Not yourself you low-down traitor! Treason! Treason!" Marley chanted.

When he heard Crowfur's last comment about a fight, he unsheathed his slightly frightening claws. Just because Marley was a loner, that didn't mean that he was going to be a lame kittypet and let Crowfur get away! "You'll be sorry you ever asked for a duel!" Marley retorted, his voice icy cold at first, then burning like fire. He scraped the ground with his claws, and dug them into the rotting wood.

Then, like lightning, he jumped. Swirving in the air, so that Marley would land on his opponent's back, the tom yowled, "Why don't you go home to your nice little den! Your other cats will be worried sick, because you won't be there to pamper and feed!" As he said this, Marley attempted to dig his claws into Crowfur's back, hoping he would hit him square on the shoulders.

((sorry about that))

[Spiderbreath||Soul]

Wow. Wow there. That's godmodding. You just can't say you did something without the other dude's consent. By this, I refer to this sentence:
"As he said this, Marley dug his claws into Crowfur's back."
This is not allowed. It should be written so:
"As he said this, Marley attempted to dig his claws into Crowfur's back."
Thank you.

[The Everlasting SUNNEH.]

((Sorry about that Spidey. I am used to writing. I haven't had a good, literate roleplay in so long, I might become a n00b myself if it weren't for my poetry!))

[Spiderbreath||Soul]

Thankee n_n All better. Just remember to watch what you type. Since this seems to be the first time, I'll let it go for now. No worrehs :3

[crowfur]

"WHAT DID YOU LOWLY PIECE OF FOX DUNG SAY? NICE DEN, YOU LONERS REALLY ARE CRAZY! WORRIED SICK MY DROPPINGS! IF THEY EVEN NOTICE THEY'LL CHEER FOR THE MOST PART!" Crowfur yowled. He darted with the speed of rage toward Marley. "TAKE THIS YOU LONER SCUM!" he yowled as he slashed. Marley however had already jumped to Crowfur's previous position. "COWARD!" Crowfur sceamed so loud the barn shook slightly. "DIE LIKE A WARRIOR SCUM!" he yowled as he darted with the sheer speed of anger, hate, and bloodlust. He won't beat me with being a coward! Stupid, dirty, smelly scum! the tom thought angrily. "DIE SCUM!" the tom yowled, eyes red with bloodlust.
"You'll die like a fly
On a leaf bare morning,
You'll suffer eternal scorning,
You'll be wailing while scaling
the wall of fear that you hold so dear
sheer death shall come soon like the rising moon." Crowfur made bloodlustic songs to make his enimies bewildered. And open to many attacks.


((Sunpelt, it's OK, battles aren't civil or polite you know.))

[ARTEMISxxx]

((May I join in this little quarrel with Strife? :3 ))

[The Everlasting SUNNEH.]

((Of course!))

Marley only laughed, as he quickly spun around, leaving Crowfur pouncing at empty spaces.
"Try and catch me if you can, Clan baby!" Marley mocked.

Really, the only thing fueling Marley's hatred, was jealously. Jealousy of having friends. Jealousy of having other cats to talk to. Jealousy of having a reason to live.

"Is that the best you can do? I've seen better from a baby hedgehog, you over-rated flea bag!" Marley taunted. He pawed the air, about to hit Crowfur's face. A slash across the eye should teach that Clan-cat a thing or two! Marley's eyes burned with rage. He remembered how they would taunt him.

Kittypet! Kittypet! Your nothing more than a sack of fur and bones, you useless rat!" The Windclan cats mocked him, when he was a young kit, asking to join their clan. They never brought it to the kind leader, whom Marley might have had a chance with. No. They took the matter in their own hands. So Marley did the one thing he knew they would hate. Go rogue.

[crowfur]

"Oh, what next? FRIENDS? To fight the battle for you? Taunting, your stalling for friends to come coward! Dirty trick, but it won't work, I don't have allies coming, my so called comrades would laugh that I would be having trouble with a loner!" Crowfur growled. At least he HAS allies, I don't, not really. he thought, somewhat jealous. "Your allies won't come fast enough, oh I forgot. You loners are close or far apart, so theirs another enemy here as well coward!" Crowfur yowled. "Die you swine!" Crowfur screeched as he leaped toward Marley, claws extended to full length, twice the size of normal claws. "Fight like a warrior!" he screamed midway through the leap. Kill him! Must kill him before another couple of cats arrive, and then I'm dead. Must kill him before the reinforcements arrive! the tom thought desperately, knowing if reinforcements arrived he was as good as dead.

((You can join Loneheart if you want, as long as there's no godmooding I'm fine with anyone joining.))

[The Everlasting SUNNEH.]

Marley hissed. Suddenly, a flashback of his old time, barely older than an apprentice. He was playing with a few of his loner friends, when he was only a kittypet. They were laughing, playing, and having a great time. A mouse ran for the Thunderpath, and Steel, one of the loner-toms, chased after it. Ivy and Amber yowled after their friend, but it was too late. Steel had been hit by the monster.

The monster continued to roll onwards, as if it didn't even know it had killed Steel. All three toms ran over to their friend, to where the dead body lay on the Thunderpath.

"You brought him here! Your responsible!" Ivy hissed, and Amber joined in.
"You call yourself a friend? Your nothing more than a rat!" Amber spat, claws unsheathed.
"He isn't even a rat! He's a kittypet!" Ivy snapped, circling in on Marley.
"Lets send him home to his twolegs, and give him a few scars, so that he won't forget what he is dealing with, when he crosses Loner territory again!" Amber yowled, and with that, the two toms prowled for a few more milliseconds, which felt like hours to Marley, and then they attacked.

Claws unsheathed, and hissing like a Tigerclan cat, the two loners pounced on Marley. He ran as fast as the wind. Never to return. Marley never had anyone he could call 'friend' again.

Marley snapped back to reality within the second, and the warrior in front of him would have no friends, only mockers, rivals, and enemies, if he found out that he had lost to a loner.

"You have no right to accuse me as a coward!" Marley spat, as tears filled in pools at the bottom of his eyes. He could not let Crowfur know his secret.

Marley jumped out of the way, and pounced onto a barrel of old hay.

[crowfur]

Crowfur saw Marley leap onto a barrel, COWARD! he thought angrily. I am not going to relive my apprentice days of being stepped on! I could do nothing about it, I attacked once, I was almost not an apprentice anymore! Because of that they did it more thoroughly. I will not let it happen again! Will not, must not, WON'T! the tom thought remembering those horrible days. He lept on top of the barrel a tail length in front of Marley. "This is where it ends, loner! Either you; or me is going down." the black tom hissed. "Make your move, come on. It ends on this here barrel!" he growled. Must stay on the barrel, if I'm down off of it, he'll jump on me and it's over. Same for him. he thought. "Move it or lose it, loner!" Crowfur yelled at Marley. Stand strong, don't let this coward kick you out of your clan, and Tall Pines Crowfur! the tom thought, hoping that the loner wouldn't be strong enough or fast enough to knock him over. The tom stared coldly into the loners eyes, hoping to see an attack from there. A glint in the eye, anything that might help. I have nothing to gain and everything to lose, don't lose Crowfur, or your dead by Flamingstar if this loner doesn't kill me. Crowfur thought grimly.

[The Everlasting SUNNEH.]

"I don't take orders from a sissy Clan cat!" Marley spat, his fur bristling like a Tigerclan cat. The feriousiousness (sp!!) in his eyes burned like flames, lapping at the air, climbing higher, until there is no more ladder for you left to climb. You can only fall into the fire. His blazing iris, and the glistening fangs of loner hate showed he was ready to take this pity excuse for a Clan cat on, any day of the moon cycle.

Marley dove downwards on the barrel, a sort of odd move for a cat to make. Besides the fact that Crowfur's belly (like any cat's) was his weakest spot, MArley had a plan.

The loner attempted to claw into Crowfur's leg. He tried to yank at Crowfur's leg, apparently making him fall off the barrel, onto the ground.

[crowfur]

Crowfur had a nasty smirk on his face the whole time. Perfect! he thought as Marley lunged. Crowfur, as soon as Marley was on his leg attempted to get a hold of Marley's neck with his mouth. Come on, come on! Crowfur thought. If this deathblow doesn't work, I'm done for! Crowfur thought.
[glow=red,2,300]IF IT WORKS:[/glow] while he was falling, Crowfur attempted to twist himself to make Marley drop first to the ground. Good, I might be able to return to Tall Pines after dealing with this sick excuse for a cat! the black tom thought mockingly. "Have to do this, sorry, loner." Crowfur said. In truth, both of them had their sides to the ground. Brace yourself! Crowfur thought as they plumeted down to the ground.


[glow=red,2,300]If it doesn't work:[/glow] Couldn't get a hold of his neck. I'm done for. Crowfur thought as he attemped to twist himself so he landed on his legs. It failed because of his injured leg. "Lousy piece of f-" he didn't finish his sentence of insults. he hit the ground of his side. "Kill me, loner, if you wish. You, have, won.." Crowfur said weakly. Pain surging through him. Looks like I'm done for. Crowfur thought.